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Name: Millie Kazin

Age: 21

Gender: Male

Village: Former Hidden Leaf Village

Ninja Rank: Akatsuki Leader

Clan: None

Looks:

Personality: Millie now has totally changed since his brother died. He tried to enter konoha and live a good life but instead couldnt deal with it. He is very hardheaded and stubborn no one can change his mind. He doesnt care about any one or any thing. He doesnt care about death and doesnt believe in it very much either. He thinks of himself as immortal and also Millie loves destruction and fighting any one he encounters. His ego has gotten very big from becoming akatsuki leader.

Special Characteristics: Millie can now use fire without having to use jutsus , with his great chakra control he can manipulate fire out of his hands.

Elements: Fire & Earth

Skills/Specialties: Ninjutsu & Puppetry

Weapons : Long Flaming Sword - Once the sword is touched by Millie its lit on fire

Jutsus :

Non Elemental Jutsus :

Sekoi Shunshin no Jutsu (Body Flash Techniques)- A jutsu where the user disappears . A flash of light is given off that temporarily blinds the enemy.

Name: Body Replacement Technique
Type: E-rank, Supplementary
Effect: This jutsu lets the user quickly switch places with another nearby object, such as a plant (normally a section of a log), an animal, or even another person within reach, leaving the opponent open to a counter-attack.

Souja Sousai no Jutsu - Twin Snake Double Assassination Technique
Classification: Ninjutsu Technique
Rank: A

Souja Sousai no Jutsu is a ninjutsu technique which had been forbidden because of its dark nature. The technique involves the user forming a special hand seal with their target, this allows them to then kill themself and their target at the same time. This technique is usually used as a last resort, when the ninja absolutely needs to kill their target at all costs.

Doton no Jutsu - Earth Release Technique
Character Use: Requires high skills or elemental affinity
Rank: A

Doton no Jutsu, the act of using the Earth Element, allows the ninja to change their chakra into earth. This allows the ninja to go into the earth and hide from his opponents, manipulate the earth in attacks or create earth to use against their opponents.

Muon Satsujin Jutsu - Silent Homicide Technique
Rank: B

Muon Satsujin Jutsu, the ability to commit a silent homicide, is a technique to dispatch your foe with no warning. Your quick speed and skills will instantly kill them before they can provide a defense. Momochi Zabuza was known as an expert in this technique during his times with the Hidden Mist ANBU.

Nehan Shouja no Jutsu - Temple of Nirvana Technique
Rank: A
Range: Close (0m ~ 5m), Mid (5m ~ 10m), Far (10m+)
Type: Supplementary

Nehan Shouja no Jutsu is a Genjutsu technique that allows the caster to place a large body of people into a unconscious state. The target can avoid the spell by forming and using the dispel skill.

Kai : Release - Description: Kai is a Ninjutsu technique which allows the ninja to avoid the effects of a Genjutsu illusion. After forming the needed handseals, the Genjutsu technique will not affect the ninja. The ninja can also use the technique on another individual who was unable to avoid the attack. After forming the needed hand seals, the ninja touches the one affected to end the affect of the spell.

Kuchiyose no Jutsu Spiritualism Technique
Description: A powerful jutsu, Ninpou Kuchiyose allows a ninja to summon animals, objects and the dead to fight on their behalf. The ninja normally signs a blood contract with the animal species, which allows him to summon different size and skill levels of creature. Please see the Summonings page for a full listing of summons and more detailed information.

Konbi Henge no Jutsu - Combination Transformation Technique
Description: Konbi Henge is a Ninjutsu technique that allows two ninja to transform themselves temporarily into another person or thing. While in the form, they can use the physical characteristics of the one they are impersonating.

Meisai Gakure no Jutsu Camouflage Concealment Technique
Description: Meisai Gakure no Jutsu is an advanced Ninjutsu technique used by Rock ninja. After forming the needed handseals, the ninja can grant themself near invisibility. So far only the Sharingan eye and its revelation abilities has been shown to pierce the veil and see the hidden ninja. It is unknown if the Byakugan can penetrate the jutsu and see the user's chakra circulatory system.

Fuin Jutsu: Sanhofuin (Sealing Technique: Three Directions Seal)
: Two shadow clones are created by Millie forming together the vertices of a triangle.By performing hand seals, a tetrahedral form of light traps the target, who is sent to another dimension. This demension is a demonsion of a hell realm , if you fall into this demension you feel as your in a hell realm and dark spirit souls are flying into your body making you unable to move for a period of time. This is a genjutsu move

Bunshin Daibakuha (Clone Great Explosion)
Type: A-rank, Offensive, Short range (0-5m)
This jutsu works in combination with the Kage Bunshin no Jutsu (Shadow Replication Technique), and basically creates a Shadow Replication that will also explode on command, potentially killing or injuring those caught in the blast.

Name: Shadow Clone Jutsu
Effect: A forbidden jutsu, that creates clones - which are not just plain illusions (like the normal bunshin no jutsu). Each clone is an exact replica of Millie, capable of attacking. A direct hit causes the clone to disappear.
Element: N/A
Rank : B
Skill: Genjutsu
History/Background: Learned while he was at the academy

Name: Substitution Jutsu
Effect: Whenever Millie Gets Hit With Anything Or Any Technique He Performs Handseals And His Body Becomes Nothing But A Wood Log And Smoke Appears In Front Of The Opponent
Element: N/A
Rank : D
Skill: Genjutsu
History/Background: Millie was born with this jutsu

Name: Body Freeze Skill
Effect: Causes an opponent to loose their sense of movement. Stops the opponent, leaving an opening for more powerful jutsu to be performed. It is assumed most Anbu know this technique.
Element: N/A
Rank : D
Skill: Ninjutsu

Name: Shadow Shuriken Clone Skill
Effect: A technique that multiplies a thrown object, into many exact replicas of the original - that all do real damage.
Element: N/A
Rank : A
Skill: Ninjutsu

Name : Summoning Jutsu : Millie's Raven ( Masatu )
Description : Millie Summons His Raven Masatu & Then Uses This Summon As An Ally To Help Him In Battle.
Rank : S
Element : Fire
Type : Ninjutsu
History / Background : Millie was born with this jutsu

All Basic Academy Jutsus

History/Background Story:

Goodbye Mother & Father

When Millie Was Born He Saw His Mother & Father As 2 Of The Best Ninjas And Growing Up He Wanted 2 Be Just Like His Father , He Was Working Out Back With His Father One Day. And Saw 3 Ninja Appear & They Just Kept Looking At His Father He Warned His Father And When His Father Saw The 3 Ninja He Told Millie To Go Inside And Millie Didn't Want To Leave His Father. His Father Pushed Him And Saved Him From 3 Kunai's And His Father Got Ready 2 Battle. The 3 Ninja Appeared Behind His Father And All Began To Stab His Father 2 Death , And Millie Watched This All. He Ran Inside And Warned His Mother , The 3 Ninja Came In And Struck His Mother...Next Thing Millie Knew She Was Gone 2 : So He Ran Away , Far Away.

Kazu - Baby Brother

He Got News That Right Before His Mom Died She Had A Baby , And He Went And Took Care Of This Baby On His Own. They Trained Together And Were Always Hanging Out And Loved Each Other Very Much , Millie Became A Great Ninja , And His Younger Brother Kazu Just Started At The Academy.

Kazu's Death

His Younger Brother Got Into A Fight With One Of The Ninja And He Won. He Was So Happy , The Ninja He Fought Got Very Mad At This And When Kazu Was Going To Recieve His Reward For Winning The Match , The Ninja Stabbed And Killed Kazu. Millie Was Waiting All Day Long For Kazu 2 Arrive And Never Did So He Went To The Academy And Found Kazu Laying Their Dead...He Grabbed Kazu And Began To Cry " He Then Pulled Out A Kunai And His Whole Body Lit On Flames , This Is When He Found Out He Could Light On Flames...He Began To Kill Every Ninja In The Academy Until He Was Finally Stopped By A Medical Justu , And Now He Wants Revenge On The 3 Ninja Who Killed His Parents , And That 1 Who Killed Kazu.

Millie's Turning Point In Life

Millie Soon Turned To Konohagakure And There He Became A Great Jounin & Academy Teacher. He Thought To Himself That He Was Losing His Goal And Then Joined The Akatsuki Organazation.

Millie's Revenge & Happiest Day Of His Life

After Joining The Akatsuki The First Thing He Did Was Go After His Brother's Murderer. He Found Him In Sunagakure And Killed Him , But He Found Out That He Had Help Killing His Little Brother. But Millie Could Care Less Because Gonza His Cousin Is The One Who Stabbed His Brother Kazu.

Take Over Of The Akatsuki
Millie noticed how much his leader Kuroshi was doing , and truthfully is was purely nothing to him. He was getting a little annoyed with having nuthing to do and always being underestimated by all his oponnents. He then thought of his own plan and tryed to get all aka to vote for him to be leader.

Revolution Group
The whole Aka group wouldn't vote on Millie becoming leader so he started his own revolution group. He then got a few ppl and planned to take over as akatsuki leader , he kidnapped seu nara and kidnapped shyke these 2 were both konoha ninjas. Shyke was rescued and brought back to konoha soon.

Millie's murderous content
Millie found out about Rouka loseing to Shyke as there fight raveled up in the grass village. He soon took Rouka to under a tree and buried him alive. Millie then also killed Uchiha Cordon in his meeting with aka members and had one of members named Sojobo kill an aka traitor who's name was Nobunaga Oda.

Roleplay Sample : Everyone already know's how i rp.


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Fire Jutsus :

Name : Fire Mines
Description : Millie Lets Out A Spit Of Chakra From His Mouth And Uses Hand Signs To Form The Spit Into A Fire Mine. When the mines are transformed there are held in the air by chakra and Millie bites down on his teeth The Mines Go Off And Explode.
Rank : A
Element : Fire
Type : Ninjutsu
History / Background : Millie used to always love playing with mines and dodging them out in his backyard so now he uses them as a jutsu of his own.

Name: Flame Thrower
Effect: Millie Focuses his chakra and uses it for a flame thrower that can be used to burn enemies , the more chakra used the farther it goes and the stronger it becomes.
Element: Fire
Rank : C
Skill: Ninjutsu
History/Background: Millie always burned up everything he had so he focused for about a year on how to make his hands into raging flame throwers.

Fire Release-Hell Fire Serpent Skill (Katon- Gouka Dakatsu no Jutsu)
B Rank
The user releases forth a flame from their mouth, as it materializes into a very large snake type shape. The snake has a three foot diamiter and is twenty feet long, and rushes at the opponent. The key danger factor of this jutsu is that, the user can change the direction of the attack at their discretion essentially making it a homing type jutsu

Fire Release-Seven Heavens (Katon- Nanatsu Kyuuten)
A Rank
A skill in which the user taking their chakra and imbue it with their flame chakra. The user will then spit out the flames toward the opponent, at first taking the form of a large burst but then splitting off into seven distinct fire spears. These spears capable of even breaking through many high level shield jutsu. Each spear is 10 feet in length

Fire Release-Focus Flame Shot (Katon- Shorten Kane Tamar no Jutsu)
B Rank
A skill in which, has the key ability for one to focus their chakra to the level of B rank. Performing the first hand seal, and holding the second one for as long as they focus their fire chakra. Streams of heat will flow off the hands, as the user pushes their hands forward. Releasing a powerful fast flying shot of flame, so powerful that it is capable of leveling an entire house

Name: Flame Cage
Effect: This jutsu is just like water prison jutsu , if Millie gets you he holds the cage with his hand and he can close it up like desert funeral
Element: Fire
Rank : B
Skill: Ninjutsu
History/Background: Millie was born with this jutsu

Name: Fire Bomb
Effect: Millie Throws A Bomb In The Air And Then Makes Multiple Bombs by using his chakra into the other bombs , And Lights Them On Fire So They All Blow Up Whenever He Sets Them Off.
Element: Fire
Rank : C
Skill: Ninjutsu
History/Background: His father taught him this before he died

Name: Fire Wall
Effect: Millie Makes A Huge Fire Wall To Defend Him , Or His Team And Him.
Element: Fire
Rank : C
Skill: Ninjutsu
History/Background: Was born was this jutsu

Name: Fire Blaze Jutsu
Effect: Millie summons a twisting blaze of fire all around you and your body and you get burnt badly. This twist comes from under the oponnent and wraps up your leg and then goes further up to your head and burns all parts it touches.
Element: Fire
Rank : B
Skill: Ninjutsu
History/Background: Millie learned from his father when they used to train out in the backyard. Millie's father was a fire element expert

Name: Mythical Fire Flower
Effect: A jutsu that sends multiple blasts of fire from the mouth, usually with one target in mind. Shurikens can also be hidden inside the flames, creating an element of surprise.
Element: Fire
Rank : B
Skill: Ninjutsu
History/Background: Millie was born with this jutsu

Name : Burning Ash Accumulation
Description : This is a Ninjutsu technique utilizing the Fire Element. After forming the needed handseals, Millie will expel an ash from his mouth. This large cloud begin to envelope his foe and when Millie clicks his teeth, the cloud will ignite in an explosion.
Rank : A
Element : Fire
Type : Ninjutsu
History / Background : Millie was born with this jutsu

Name : Running Fire
Description : This is a Ninjutsu technique utilizing the Fire Element. To utilize this technique, Millie will first pump up his chakra which he will use to generate jets of fire which will race towards his target and surround them. This fire can be made more powerful with the introduction of wind from a wind element attack.
Then Millie will spin and generate a rotating ring of fire, which he will launch towards his target.
Rank : B
Element : Fire
Type : Ninjutsu
History / Background : Millie was taught this jutsu by his father

Name : Fire Dragon Flame Projectile
Description : This is a Ninjutsu technique utilizing the Fire Element. The ninja does a string of hand seals and the proceeds to blow a large jet of fire from their mouth.
Rank : B
Element : Fire
Type : Ninjutsu
History / Background : Millie was taught this jutsu by his mother

Name : Head Minacing Pain
Description : This is a Ninjutsu technique used by Millie. After releasing the Fire elemental from his body, Millie will command the entity to release a large flaming mass from its mouth. This mass will quickly spread along the ground and race towards its target, burning anything in its path.
Rank : B
Element : Fire
Type : Ninjutsu
History / Background : Millie was born with this jutsu

Name : Dragon Fire Technique
Description : This is a Ninjutsu technique utilizing the Fire Element. After binding the opponent, the ninja uses a guide wire to unleash a large torrential fire burst onto the target.
Rank : C
Element : Fire
Type : Ninjutsu
History / Background : Millie learned this jutsu from messing with fire and wire in his dojo.


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Post by Guest on Fri Jun 20, 2008 1:55 am

Earth Jutsus :

Name: Mud Slime
Effect: Covers the opponent in oozy / gooey mud. Then Millie closes his hand and the mud begins to suck onto you hard so you cannot escape unless you use a great technique to get out of it and cannot breathe because the mud gets into your body and all over you so you cannot breathe through your mouth or nose and you are getting squeezed tightly like being bear hugged
Element: Earth
Rank : B
Skill: Ninjutsu
History/Background: Millie used to always like to throw mud at the children when they would laugh at him and make frun of him and make him feel bad about himself as a shinobi

Name: Avalanche
Effect: Millie creates a huge avalanche in the area causing everything to break or knock down.
Element: Earth
Rank : B
Skill: Ninjutsu
History/Background: Millie used to love the sounds of tumbling rocks hitting everything so he made up his own jutsu.

Name: Muddy Grounds
Effect: Millie puts mud under his opponents feet and then sucks them down so the only thing visible is their heads.
Element: Earth
Rank : B
Skill: Ninjutsu
History/Background: Millie was born with this jutsu

Name: Earthquake Jutsu
Effect: Millie Slams His Hand To The Ground And Then Forms Some Hand Seals And Cracks The Area He Is In Splitting Up Him And His Opponent And Possibly Killing His Opponent If They Fall Off The Surface.
Element: Earth
Rank : A
Skill: Ninjutsu
History/Background: Millie encountered and earthquake once and then made the earthquake jutsu his own.

Name: Earth Dumpling Jutsu
Effect: Millie Strikes The Ground With His Hands, Then Millie Is Able To Overturn The Earth Into A Large Dumpling Shape Chunk Of Earth The Size Of A Boulder. Using His Immense Strength, He Can Lift Up The Ball And Hurl It At His Opponent, Flatening All In Its Path.
Element: Earth
Rank : B
Skill: Ninjutsu
History/Background: Millie was born with this jutsu

Name: Rock Prison Jutsu
Effect: Millie Performs Perfect Handsigns And Then Captures & Locks You Into A Tight Rock Prison That Then Closes Up And If You Can't Escape All Rocks Close In On You And Kill You.
Element: Earth
Rank : A
Skill: Ninjutsu
History/Background: Millie always messed around with his dad in the back and his dad showed him this jutsu and how to do it.

Name: Earth Barrier
Effect: Millie Performs Hand Signs To Perfect The Jutsu & Then Summons A Huge Earth Barrier That Is Very Hard To Be Broken Down So He Cannot Be Attacked Or He Can Not Be Interfered With When Battling An Opponent. Millie has to give off a pretty good amount of chakra to keep the barrier in place and still. This barrier is just a barrier of chakra millie can be seen within the barrier and can see his opponents.
Element: Earth
Rank : A
Skill: Genjutsu
History/Background: Millie was born with this jutsu

Name: Earth Release: Grave of Despair
Description: This jutsu buries the opponent alive. It is a B-Rank technique because the opponent is held in place by pressurized chakra. Once Millie gets his oponnent onto the ground he performs handsigns and opens up a grave in the area by using chakra , by using more chakra he sinks the oponnent down into the grave and then closes his hands and the grave closes.
Element: Earth
Rank: B
Type: Ninjutsu
History / Background : Millie dug many opponents alive with a shovel so instead he made an easier way to do this burying.

Doton: Yomi Numa Swamp of the Underworld
Description: Doton Yomi Numa is a Ninjutsu technique used by the Sannin Jiraiya utilizing the Earth element. After forming the needed hand seals, a vast swamp can appear beneath his target to sink and kill it.

Name: Earth Release: Rock Lodging Destruction
Type: B-rank, Offensive, All ranges
Effect: This jutsu dislodges rocks above an opponent to crush them.

Name: Earth Release: Split Earth Turn Around Palm
Type: C-rank, Offensive, All ranges
Effect: This technique causes the ground surrounding the enemy to spiral inwards on itself, burying them alive or crushing them.

Name : Earth Corridor
Description : This is a Ninjutsu technique utilizing the Earth Element. To utilize this technique, Millie will first gather chakra. After that he will begin slamming his fists to the ground, the earth will rise up and over his target, imprisoning them.
Rank : B
Element : Earth
Type : Taijutsu


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Post by Guest on Fri Jun 20, 2008 1:56 am

Puppetry :

Kugutsu no Jutsu - Puppetry Technique
Rank: C
Range: Close (0m ~ 5m), Mid (5m ~ 10m)
Type: Attack, Defense, Supplementary

Kugutsu no Jutsu is a Ninjutsu technique that allows a ninja to use a puppet to attack from afar. Using their body's chakra, the ninja emits strings of chakra that run from their fingers to the puppet. The puppet itself can be loaded with many weapons and tools, allowing the puppet master to remain hidden while the puppet moves and attacks the target.

Puppets

Elite Rebels - 4 Elite Puppets Mastered By Millie Kazin

Zumaki (Flamez) - Zumaki is Millie's first puppet he ever had.
Zumaki wears a long red cape over him covering his head and his whole body. His eyes are blazing red and he is a flaming puppet. His arms light on fire and his legs , then his hair starts to light up. He can shoot fire balls from his mouth and burn his opponent with any type of hit since he lights up. His feet have 3 holes in them each. One hole is for poison , another is for fire balls , and the other is for rocks. All 3 holes shoot out. His stomach can open up for a flame thrower to shoot out. Also carries a 2 swords that he can light on fire and slice people with

Controlled with Left Hand Thumb & Index Finger

Fiziero (Steel) - Fiziero is Millie's defensive puppet. Its body is rock element hard and cannot be broken with jus a light punch or anything weak. Fiziero has the ability to stretch out as wide as Millie can stretch his fingers to defend his allies.

Controlled with Right Hand Thumb & Index Finger

Mivaro (Blade) - Mivaro is another offensive attack puppet for Millie and he has 2 open holes in his stomach where long swords come out from and his finger nails turn into long blades and Arms and Legs turn into sharp and long razor bladed swords.

Giant Puppet Scroll - This puppet has to be controlled with all 10 fingers , he is the size of a giant and he spits out fire , and poison from his mouth. His hands are the size of boulders and they can open up and shoot huge rockets. His arms are stick long and can slice people with it. His stomach can open up and shoot out kunais , shurikens , poison , smoke bombs , explosives. He can also open up his whole upper section and lock anything into him and suffocate them or kill them with any weapons he has.

Puppet # 1 - Musta : Musta's abilites consist of many different attributes. One ability he has is his sharp edged hat that he can throw and possibly cut an opponent's head off or a body part. His hands are also sharp twisting claws made of metal. Spears can also shoot from the holes in his 2 shoulders.

Puppet # 2 - Gusta : Gusta can open up his hand and rockets shoot out of the socket. He also wields 2 sharp swords

Puppet # 3 - Justa : Justa can shoot loads of fire from his mouth like a dragon and also can open up his chest and loads of kunais shoot from it. While he can open his stomach and loads of shurikens can shoot from that. He can shoot poison bombs from his leg holes.

Puppet # 4 - Fusta : Fusta can fly into the air and strike you with his 2 katans he wields.

Puppet # 5 - Kusta : Kusta can stretch out all of his body parts to as wide as the controlers hands can stretch , so he can dodge attacks easily.

Kugutsu no Jutsu (Puppet Technique)
: This jutsu uses strings of chakra from the user's fingers to control puppets like marionettes. This skill is often prepared in coordination with the Body Replacement Technique so the user can quickly switch places with their puppet when necessary. Another useful quality of this skill is the fact that the puppet can take the form of another person, usually its user, allowing the user to trick their enemy into thinking they're fighting a living person.
Any number of chakra strings can be used to control a puppet, but users with more skill using the technique can use fewer strings per puppet. Both Chiyo and Sasori demonstrated the ability to control entire puppets perfectly using just one string. While most puppeteers would normally be able to control ten puppets at most (one per finger), Sasori's self-modification allowed him to control up to one hundred puppets at a time.
Apart from being used to control marionettes, the chakra strings can be attached to other objects, allowing the user to control, or at the very least disrupt, other things. In one instance, Kankuro uses chakra strings to trip Naruto Uzumaki when they first meet. In another, Chiyo uses chakra strings to control Sakura Haruno like a puppet.


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Post by Guest on Fri Jun 20, 2008 2:05 am

where did you learn the medical techinuqes required for the dead soul.. that is a highly advanced medical ninjutsu
and sorry... as of right now its been to long a day. thats the only thing wrong i caught but otherwise it was fine... make a quick look over if any other begins to approve. but i had graduation today and all that jazz and im beat. ill recheck tomorrow if no one else has

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Post by Guest on Fri Jun 20, 2008 2:06 am

Alright thanx , took it out.

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Post by Guest on Fri Jun 20, 2008 10:37 am

Updated & Bump.

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Post by Guest on Fri Jun 20, 2008 10:55 am

-'Millie can now use fire without having to use jutsus and such and also gets extra chakra boosts when he uses his fire jutsus. '; explain that better. Using fire would expend chakra, not give you a boost...
-'Muon Satsujin Jutsu - Silent Homicide Technique'; I believe that was a trait exclusive to Zabuza. Remove it please.
-'Sanjuu Rashoumon - Triple Rashoumon '; If you perform a summon, you can't summon that.
-'Fuin Jutsu: Sanhofuin'; Give more detail to that jutsu , including rank, info about the dimensions, etc.
-'Doton Kurogane jouhi (Iron Skin)'; Someone else already has a jutsu like that. Remove it please.
-'Shinranshin no Jutsu Mind Derangement Technique '; That's the "bloodline" of the Yamanaka Clan. Remove it.
-'Name: Shadow Clone Jutsu'; That's B ranked.
-'Name: Body Freeze Skill'; Is that Kanashibari? if it is, it's D ranked.
-'Name: Shadow Shuriken Clone Skill'; That's A ranked..
-'Name : Sealing Technique; that seemsto me like the unique trait of the Shodaime Hokage. Remove it.
-'Fire Style - Tornado Jutsu; i already have a jutsu like that. Please remove it.
-'Fire Mines'; Explain that better. Does the fire glue itself to something? if yes, remove it, as someone else already has it.
-'Flame Thrower'; More details.
-'Hell Fire Serpent Skill (Katon- Gouka Dakatsu no Jutsu)'; remove the part about being one of the most difficult fire ninjutsus to learn...
-'Melting Rain Skill (Katon- Yuutename no Jutsu)'; remove that jutsu. I already have something like that.
-'Flame Cage'; more detail. The description doesn't make sense... "die and burn to death"? lmfao!
-'Fire Bomb'; you "make" bombs? that doesn't make sense...
-' Fire Wall'; remove the 'from any attacks' part... that jutsu is pretty weak and is nowhere near of being able to defend from every attack...
-'Fire Blaze Jutsu'; more detail.
-'Running Fire '; that's nowhere near S. It may not even be A...
-'Head Minacing Pain; same as above.
-'Earth Dumpling Jutsu; that's B ranked.
-'Earth Barrier '; more details
-' Earth Release: Grave of Despair'; more details.
-'Name : Earth Corridor'; That's more like a B
-'Hitokugutsu Human Puppet'; remove that.


As you can see, you seriously have problems with details and ranking of your jutsus... i suggest you recheck them all unless you want to be here forever, lol!

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Post by Guest on Fri Jun 20, 2008 11:15 am

Well the Silent Homicide Technique many people have on this site. Its simple not that hard it's just going very fast behind the opponent and striking them making it much harder to defend.

Edited The Rest !

Also how do i simply get Human Puppet then ?

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Post by Guest on Fri Jun 20, 2008 11:20 am

About the Silent Homicide, it's not even close to S anyways... If it's a B, it's too much.

About the human puppet, you don't that. Supposedly, that's a tech Sasori developed on his own and never taught anyone.

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Post by Guest on Fri Jun 20, 2008 11:22 am

Edited the homicide rank.

Took out human puppet.

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Re: Millie Kazin - Final State. [Approved] BB

Post by Guest on Fri Jun 20, 2008 12:45 pm

Is this good ?

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Post by Guest on Fri Jun 20, 2008 12:47 pm

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Post by Guest on Fri Jun 20, 2008 12:48 pm

Thanx alot , also can a mod or admin take out my 2 old apps that are in the akatsuki folder and put this there instead. please and thank you

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